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ID Card Visual Novel (Update 4) by TheXtra89 ID Card Visual Novel (Update 4) by TheXtra89

Sorry it's taken so long for the next update. I have been working on it. I fell into a bit of a slump, but I just got out of it. However, I'll be away from my computer for the next few days, so just be patient a little while longer. PS. Please don't ask when it's coming out (I don't blame those who ask, but it causes more stress than I want for this).

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I always enjoy learning how to use different mediums. I tried my hand at visual novels. I'm sorry I don't quite know how to upload it here (it's in html5, I believe).

Here's the link: thextra.itch.io/id-card or 

I'm going to kind of treat it like this: fav.me/d8coolx where you guys can suggest branches in the story. Here's the current open branches:

1. Testing the Limits
    a. 
Clothes and Hair
        i. Mall
             1. Flirty
             2. Interesting
        ii. Beach
    b. Not Your Card

2. Asking a Friend
    b. Pregnant

Here would be a sample suggestion:

2. Ask a Friend

Summary: Gary suggests to bring over a mutual friend, Rebecca. Rebecca comes over, and they come over to see if the card works with her (it does). One the of the things they say is for Quin to get older. Quinn ages to around 30. They then accidentally say that Quinn looks like he/she is married.

The more detailed the better. Let's see how this goes. This is my first time doing something like this, so it might be a little choppy at times (it might take a little while to load). If there are any issues, let me know and I'll do my best to fix it.


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:iconniclove:
NicLove Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
ever time I'm done with the story, the music starts again.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Oct 8, 2017  Student Writer
Yo, how's it going?
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2017  Student Writer
So, how much longer til the next update?
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll do my best to get it up by Sunday, but no concrete promises.
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NicLove Featured By Owner Oct 10, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
now, what is the date for the next update ?
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Oct 5, 2017  Student Writer
I understand
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NicLove Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
p.s. You forgot to change the weight is some parts.
Getting shorter
becoming a girl
going from B to D
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NicLove Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"( b. Not Your Card )"
You forgot to show the card change as Gary becomes Gina

Can we get a compilation of all the Quinn/Catherine ID-cards.

p.s. How old are they ?

P.S. Every time a Save a place, and you do a Up-Date they place doesn't get Up-Dated with he Changes nor the Options



1)  "( b. Pregnant )" they change Rebecca into a nurse

2) "( 2. Interesting )" one of the guys wants to stay a girl

3) "( b. Not Your Card )" Can we have them kiss one a other. Please.  and then we have to pick  Mall OR Beach
3.5) "( b. Not Your Card + Mall )" They meat the guys and they make the Card about them and ...

4) "( 2. Asking a Friend )" Rebecca sees the Card and ask "Is that your Card" then the Card changes to Gary

5) "(  b. Not Your Card OR 2. Interesting )" Gina goes to the Bathroom and tacks a Shower

6) Some were some how, they change a girl into a guy

7) "( 1. Flirty )" They want to see a movie, but they are too young, so they change Catherine into a 18 year old, and does the 'Not Your Card' and Catherine changes Gary into a 20 year old

8) "( b. Pregnant )" Catherine ask Rebecca to say that she will fill no pain

9) "( b. Pregnant )" When Gary is born, Catherine can change some part of baby, because the baby is part of her

10) "( ii. Beach )" Catherine meats Girl-3 and Gary some how changes her into Guy-3

11) "( 2. Interesting )" before changing back, they see what tip of girls they can become

12) "( Clothes and Hair )" Quinn/Catherine looks to see if her closes in her dresser and closet have change to

13) "( 2. Interesting )" before changing back they ether go to the Beach or the Pool

14) "( 2. Interesting )" they find Guy-1/Girl-1 with guys buying her stuff
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
The two characters are 20 years old (roommates, I don't believe I've clarified that). Sometimes I get lazy with the cards; I'll eventually make one for Gina. Yeah, when I do an update, it completely replaces the old version, so it shouldn't keep the save file (I don't know a way around it). I guess it's the cost of playing it while it's being created.

Lots of stuff there; I'll look through each point and see what I can use.
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NicLove Featured By Owner Edited Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
"( The two characters are 20 years old  )" 
MHM.. How about they want to see a kids movie, but they don't let you go in if you don't have a kid, ...



"( Sometimes I get lazy with the cards )" 
Are you going to make one for Guy 1-3 ?



"( Lots of stuff there; I'll look through each point and see what I can use. )"
Thanks



p.s. You stell have what I said before ?
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
There's probably not going to be very many kids in this one. There's no reason to make a card for them if the card's not linked to them (it might eventually, but not right now). I have a list of everything suggested to me. I don't really think about who sent it, but just direction I think would be enjoyable to write/draw (I'm selfish that way).
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NicLove Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
K
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Homerman76 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Artist
I like the call back to some of your previous transformed characters with that "interesting" route.  Really can't wait to see more of this, always love your work :D
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Haha, yeah, I had fun with that one. Though, if I keep on using those characters, I might actually have to have more than one expression.

Thanks; glad you liked it.
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Dannykowalczik Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
nice job on the VN i enjoyed what i was reading doing and great job from what i was a able to read so far nice job on the art and spelling. i have played a ton of VN i enjoyed what you have made so far i was wondering when your done making it are you going to make it so you can download it or are you going to keep it a web VN but anyway great work so far
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for reading it. Always nice to hear.

I think there is a way to download it already (since I get notifications that people downloaded it) but don't quite know how. I'll be sure to include it in the update notes if you're interested. I wanted to make this VN as accessible as possible, which is why it's in the web browser (I'm just worried about the load time and size at this point).
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Dannykowalczik Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
i see your point i have helped some in the making of indie VNs coding can be a pain to deal with when making and writing a VN but from what i read of your VN was well made i saw very few flaw and almost no misspells but making it downloadable would make it so more people know of your work and can play and enjoy it offline and it can also help by making it not web browser but one you can and can't play online cause some can take and show others your work one of the best ways to get started is by word of mouth believe it or not but at one time there were very few VNs in English it wasn't till by word of mouth that they started selling and becoming alot easier to find in a language you can read just a business tip to give about the plus of making it downloadable and offline playable but great job on your work
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for the advice; I'm very ignorant of the already established community, so anything I learn of what is the best option is a plus. There is an option to make a windows/iOS/etc version. I'll see what I can do there in the next update.
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Dannykowalczik Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
that is fine no one if perfect i was just trying to help one of the most type of software i have met VN user and maker use is windows cause it is easy to customize your pc for VNs to work for it the first version to make of the VN to download would be for windows 7 cause alot of  people i know use widows 7 cause it is easier to use and make for pc so the first version you make should be for windows and if you want if your just starting make your first VN a free download to play then your next seeing how well you do you can make it payable cause you have made your first and is now known plus if you want to know of a VN that was good that the team started a free game was the sunriders VNs the first was free then after it became known there next sunrider games became payable and they are good VNs so there is some tips for you PM me if you want to learn more about VNs and we can talk
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I'll keep that in mind moving forward. Thanks for the advice.
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Dannykowalczik Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
no problem am here to help if you need some good luck on the next update the Rebeca path with the pregnancy was funny you should work on hers some more cause i notice gary has alot of screentime so far just some feedback on what i have read but let me know good luck and if you need help PM me it is what i do if am not working in IRL
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Kobi-Tfs Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice~ I'll check out the official VN when I have the time~
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Laser-Wing Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
I don't know if you can do anything about that, but the game just freezes at some points. In particular: "Not your card" after Quinn makes him a girl, and "Interesting" after Quinn/Cat leaves the bar.
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for letting me know (it doesn't happen on my computer). I believe it's the nature of it being a web browser game. You can try downloading it. That might help. I can try to optimize it but not sure how much it will help. I'm still somewhat new at this so I'll need to figure out ways this doesn't happen again.
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Laser-Wing Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Maybe it's an issue with Firefox? I tried it with Chrome and it seems to work fine.
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Maybe. I'm going to see if I can include a download version in the future. That might help with load times.
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Regreme Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Darn. Was hoping Gary would find a way to take advantage of the interesting event there. Buuuut, I have to admit, I do love how he looks as a girl. XD
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Edited Sep 25, 2017  Student Writer
1. Testing the Limits
     b. Not Your Card
       i. Further changes

Summary: Catherine decides to get some revenge on the now changed Gina as she decides to add some more changes to the newly changed girl, testing out some other aspects of the ID card.

Gina: C-Come on Catherine, let's not be hasty.

Catherine: *Smirks* Oh I will be, now it's my turn to experiment. You have a meek and shy personality and your in sexy underwear

Gina: *Starts blushing as her clothes change into black lingerie bra and panties* W-W-Why w-w-would you d-do this?

Catherine: Well first was to see how sexy your body is now and if I can change your personality. Now then, since you made me have long hair and different eye colors, so now it's my turn. You have hair that goes down to your butt and is bright red and your eyes are also the same shade of red.

Gina: *Hair grows out to her butt and becomes red along with her eyes* W-Why so much? A-And why red?

Catherine: Well you changed my hair and eye color, so I thought we should be even.

Gina: C-Come on Catherine. . .

Catherine: Hmm. . .what to change next?
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks for the suggestion. It's always nice to have dialog included. I've been debating what to do with Gina; this might help a bit.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Student Writer
Does this also mean you might actually add it?
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It's possible; I'll see if I can make a script.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Student Writer
Ok cool. Good luck. So what do you think should happen to Gina in this line?
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Are you really asking the author to give away the ending of a story? ;)

I've got an idea, but I want to see if it's actually good first.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Oct 4, 2017  Student Writer
So, how long until the next update?
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Student Writer
I do think though you should put the options button on the other side of the screen, mainly cause it's not easy to click it cause of the enlarge screen option.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Student Writer
^^"

Sure thing.
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jgresidenevil Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Student Writer
Cool, think of it as Catherine's payback.
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The-PBG Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Okay this took a unusual turn :S
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NicLove Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
In which part ?
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Team-Ehiro Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Hello! Great game! However there are a few things you can add for player convince. Mainly ant the end of your non finished storyline you should put a path under construction sign up so players would know when they reached the end of a thread.
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I think I can do that. Thanks for the suggestion. And thanks for playing.
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Team-Ehiro Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Oh, one more thing. Tryano builder recently updated. The new version runs a lot smoother. also it gives you a tone of UI options. (Sorry I also make a transformation themed game on tyrano builder and just wanted to share a few tips.)
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Thanks. I'll take a look at it to see if I've already downloaded it (I did a download before, and it completely messed everything up). That's cool; do you have a link? I'd like to see how other people do it.
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Team-Ehiro Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
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Alright, Theres the link to our game. Ummm, Please keep in mind that we're writers not artists. so there some inconsistencies with the art, also like you, we're pretty new at this.
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Played through it and I enjoyed it (though I only went through one path, don't know if the options lead to different places). I can see you guys put passion into it. I always like clever magical items. My suggestion would be to make sure the text stays within the box (the sentences sometimes would get too long) and a couple of spelling mistakes (dose instead of does, I think).

Keep up the work and good luck.
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Team-Ehiro Featured By Owner Sep 26, 2017
Yea, we just incorporated the new UI and we're still working out the kinks. Good luck with your game too!
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
Something interesting to think about. Gary said 'she's an old friend of mine that just moved in nearby.' Would the ID card make that lie reality? But neither realizes it until later? Or is there a limit to what the ID card can change after all? 

I just realized... poor Cat... having to figure out how to use the rest room as a lady...

'She would hit me if I even joked about it.' Did that appear on the ID? Or again, is there some RULES about the card we haven't seen yet? 

So.... rather than Catherine's child be a clone of her... Gary becomes the father and then is made to go poof? Did the card leave with him? How did 'control' go to Rebecca?

OH! So THAT'S what happened!

If the card was somehow still with Gary... I think Cat would feel something like that poking around her insides, and it wouldn't have made Rebecca the controller. 

Interesting. 
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
One of the implied rules is that only the person on the card can't change themselves (they just have to be within hearing distance).
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zogman1 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017
I'm just getting a black screen.
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TheXtra89 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2017  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
It might take a little while to load. The game is getting a bit larger now. Sorry for the inconvenience.
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